2011-11-07 13:57:00 作者: 来源:考试吧
话题:旅游
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Travel Alone or Travel with a Companion? You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:
1)有的人喜欢独自旅行,有的人喜欢与别人结伴而行
2)两种旅行方式的好处
3)你更喜欢哪种旅行方式,为什么?
Travel Alone or Travel with a Companion?
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行文思路
本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第1点指出两种不同的旅行方式,提纲第2点要求分别阐述两种旅行方式的好处,提纲第3点要求表明“我”的倾向,由此可判断本文应为对比选择型作文。
根据所给提纲,本文应包含如下内容:指出人们对旅行方式的不同偏好:有人喜欢独自旅行,有人喜欢结伴旅行;对比阐述独自旅行和结伴旅行各自的好处;表明“我”更喜欢于哪种旅行方式,并说明理由。
高分范文
Travel Alone or Travel with a Companion?
[1]When it comes to traveling way, different people will offer different opinions. [2]Some people like to travel alone, [2]while others prefer to travel with a companion. [3]Of course, everyone has his consideration for his preference.
[4]Traveling alone, one can enjoy more freedom. The traveler can arrange his tour as he wishes without the trouble of humoring others. [3]Moreover, traveling alone [5]tend to bring the traveler [6]unexpected surprise, [7]such as making a new friend and enjoying a different scenery. [8]Compared with traveling alone, traveling with a companion has also its advantages. [3]For one thing, the group members can help and look after each other in the journey. [3]For another, [4]traveling with others who have same interest with, you can share costs and experiences with them.
[9]As to me, I prefer to travel with a companion. [3]Firstly, we can deal with the possible problems and difficulties in the journey. [3]Secondly, I like to share the pleasure of traveling with others. [3]In sum, [10]both traveling alone and traveling with a companion have their attractions, and you can find the pleasure from either one.
亮点点评
[1]“当涉及到或谈到…时”。
[2]用于提出两种不同的观点、态度或喜好。
[3]过渡衔接词语,使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。
[4]现在分词短语作伴随状语。
[5]“倾向,趋于”。
[6]“意外的惊喜”。
[7]表示列举。
[8]“和…相比”。
[9]用于引出自己的观点或选择。
[10]“或者…,或者”。
佳句临摩
1.佳句:When it comes to traveling way, different people will offer different opinions.
临摩:当谈到是否应该取消“黄金周”假期时,人们的看法各不相同。
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2.佳句:Compared with traveling alone, traveling with a companion has also its advantages.
临摩:和城市相比,乡村的经济相对落后。
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3.佳句:Both traveling alone and traveling with a companion have their attractions, and you can find the pleasure from either one.
临摩:网络教学和传统教学都有其各自的优点,因此,我们应该将二者相结合。
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KEY:
1. When it comes to whether we should cancel the “golden week” holiday, different people will offer different opinions.
2. Compared with the cities, the countryside is relatively backward in economy.
3. Both network teaching and traditional school teaching have their advantages. Therefore, we should combine these two teaching ways.
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